Thursday 9 May 2013

Primary 3 - Picture Composition- Character highlight

Part of our learning composition skills is to understand a character and using a character to start the essay.

The following was written by our student Gennie Poh P3 from Yio Chu Kang Primary. She used the character strategy to start the composition. The story flows fluently and conversation was added to make the story interesting. Good Job Gennie! Keep it up!





     Mr Lim is a kleptomaniac. He enjoys the thrill of getting away with items he pickpockets. Every now and then , he will find delight in pinching things from stores.

    Last Friday, Mr Lim was at Hougang Mall. He saw a sea of people as there was a sale going on. His heart skipped a beat when he saw a wide variety of items.

    He had been thinking of buying a wallet for himself. Suddenly, he saw a grey wallet on the shelf. A naughty idea came to his mind. He secretly took the grey wallet and put it in his bag. His heart was pacing fast. He shot darting eyes everywhere hoping that no one had noticed him.

    As he walked towards the exit, the security alarm sounded. Mr Lim's face turned pale. He stood rooted to the ground. "Excuse me sir, are you sure you have pay for everything?" asked the security guard. Mr Lim did not know what to do. Just then, a man walked by. "Hey! You are the one who stole a grey wallet ! I saw you stealing!" shouted the man. "No! I ... I didn't ..." Mr Lim avoided his steady gaze.

    The security guard immediately brought Mr Lim to the police station. He was under arrest and was put in prison for two years. Mr Lim had learnt his lesson and promised himself that he would never steal again.









Continuous Writing Composition - P4

This was one of our more well written essay based on a continuous writing essay. Keep up the good work Xiang Luan!



Continuous Writing Essay


Written by Yeap Xiang Luan Pri 4 Mee Toh Primary School

You were walking home from school one day when you saw a man walking towards you, and talking to himself.

Based on the above situation, write a story of at least 120 words.





"Mr Toh was fiercer than usual today. I wonder what was up with him." I mumbled to myself. I was walking home by myself after school to enjoy my mother’s handmade lunch. Suddenly, I saw a shaggy looking rotund man looking at me. He was walking towards me and mumbling to himself. His mouth opened from time to time. I felt as though there was a threat in the air. As the man got closer, I grimaced as I walked just inches away from him.


Suddenly, from the corner of my eye, I saw him whipping out a handkerchief from his pocket and covered my nose. Everything turned black as I fell unconscious. When I woke up , I was tied to a chair, with my mouth stuffed with the handkerchief I saw earlier. I was in an old hut and the rotund man was standing in front of me. "You’ll stay here until your father, Mr Lim, pays me!" he bellowed. I started to panic. The man had mistaken me for someone else. My father was Mr Ng. Beads of sweat started trickling down my forehead. My heart was racing really fast.

I struggled so much that my wallet fell out of my pocket. The rotund man picked it up. Then he looked inside. He must have realised he caught the wrong person as his face looked puzzled while looking at my student card. Minutes later, I was covered with another handkerchief and when I woke up I heard rumbling sounds. I was in a truck. The truck stopped and the man lifted my up and untied my hands and left me on the roadside. He then drove off. It was very late as there was no one around me except the traffic lights blinking in the distant.

Luckily I had some stashed up money in my pocket. I waited a long time for a taxi to appear. When I reached home, I saw my parents standing at the gate with worried look on their faces. There were two other police officers with them. I ran up to them, they hugged me tightly as I recounted the event to them.

After reporting the incident to the police officers, they left. I could not imagine what would have happened if my wallet had not fallen out. Sigh! I was very relieved that I was safe at home